Riley

Bioethics
The year is 2040 and Jake is a mere twenty-two year old who has trained his entire life to run the 400 for his country in the Olympics. His dream has finally come true as he runs the best time of his life in order to make the finals. The final race comes and Jake feels more ready than ever as he gets into his blocks. The gun sounds and all the runners are off. Jake feels his pace but seems to be falling behind. He picks up the pace but everyone else has that longer smoother stride and uses less energy than Jake. Jake finally crosses the line in a time that would have broken the world record in the last Olympics four years ago but still finishes an embarrassing dead last. As Jake tries to catch his breath he notices that he was the only finalist that all natural body parts. As farfetched as this might seem, this future is closer than one might think. Scientists are helping athletes find shortcuts by researching athletes’ bodies.
Scientists are constantly running tests on athletes to come up with ways to speed up training and improve ability. In fact Xsens Technologies in Las Vegas has come up with ways to test motion with special suits with sensors on them. The results of detailed motion will come up on a monitor where scientists can research how the human body succeeds in certain physical areas (Murray). Another larger group is called the International Society of Biomechanics of Sports. This group is stationed all over the world and has a main focus is on the Olympic athletes. They first started in the 1976 Olympic Games with numerous studies on the athletes. Scientists looked for what made them great in their areas (“General Information”). Once this is found, scientists then look for ways to make that area better. This can range anywhere from better motion to faster and better training. Scientists also look into the physics of a certain sport and how athletes can best match the computer models (“Biomechanics & Physics of Sports”). Now some of these ways have already been caught and banned like steroids or corking a baseball bat. There are artificial ways that have not been banned yet.
Scientists have gone into deep studies of tennis players. They have found out that tennis players who are tall and have long arms have a better advantage of serving the ball high, which would create a faster speed than the serve of shorter players. Using these studies scientists conducted what would be the best tennis player possible. They took Roger Frederer’s hand eye coordination, Rafael Nadal’s determination and aggression, and Andy Roddick’s serve (Mehaffey). When combining all these great players’ attributes, scientists can make players great instead of players having to work hard to achieve great success.
A major controversy that has come up is centered on a man named Oscar Pistorious from South Africa. Oscar was born without fibulas and had to have both legs amputated from the knees down when he was only eleven months old. Growing up his dream was to run in the Olympics. Since this goal is nearly impossible with his condition, he has had to settle for the Paralympics were he holds the record for the 100, 200, and 400. Now, however, Oscar’s dream showed signs of reality when he came across new prosthetic legs called “Cheetahs.” These legs are scientifically designed for running. Oscar has now come across a major problem due to the fact that the “Cheetahs” are too good. They are made more flexible than human legs because the ankle angle is greater than 30 percent more range than a normal humans ankle (Robinson). This also causes Oscar to run at the same speed as an able-bodied runner but use less energy. The International Association of Athletics Federations (I.A.A.F.) claims that the “Cheetahs” are considered technical aids which give Oscar an advantage that the other athletes don’t have.
Science is allowing shortcuts in human abilities with advanced research of the human body. If society allows this, they won’t stop with what they have; they will only come up with bigger and better results. For example, soccer goalies will have extra long arms and swimmers will have special aqua legs designed like fish fins. Sports will soon no longer be a competition of hard work and dedication but of science and research.

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